I have red hair because god knew I needed a warning label shirt

I have red hair because god knew I needed a warning label shirt

Whew I have red hair because god knew I needed a warning label shirt, another Hal Thomas! And it looks like a long one, too. Thanks, Glacial! You are very welcome my friend! Hope you enjoyed. Just caught up, you’re doing great work here! Your ability to build an atmosphere and show rather than tell is really impressive. This t-shirt has the content and design by shipertee Shop

I have red hair because god knew I needed a warning label shirt, ladies tee, tank top, v-neck

I have red hair because god knew I needed a warning label ladies tee
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I have red hair because god knew I needed a warning label tank top
tank top

There are definitely some I have red hair because god knew I needed a warning label shirt where I thought the description was a little clunky, not quite as smooth as the rest of the worldbuilding. In this chapter specifically, Jake’s little poetic piece about humanity going off into the yonder felt a little out of place, I don’t want to call it shoehorned, but perhaps too early or too effusive? Overall though, I’m quickly falling in love with the world you’re building, all of the hints at this rich history but a strong focus on this story, with these characters. This t-shirt has the content and design by shipertee Shop

Official I have red hair because god knew I needed a warning label sweatshirt, hoodie

I have red hair because god knew I needed a warning label sweatshirt
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I have red hair because god knew I needed a warning label hoodie
hoodie

I’d actually considered I have red hair because god knew I needed a warning label shirt removing the part of the scene where Jake is reflecting on human HFY or at least trimming it up a bit. Now I think I will do that, once I’m finished with the current chapter(4) that I’m working on that is I went back and re-read it myself and it felt a little to drawn out, monologuing/waxing poetic maybe? I appreciate the insight and constructive criticism my friend. Thank you for reading Hal Thomas. This t-shirt has the content and design by shipertee Shop

 

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